Response to Kody's "Over the Counter"

       This story is about a father, our protangonist, who is unable to pay his bills and provide for his three children Jimmy, Sarah, and Ben. The narrator has a job as a pharmacy technician, but it is not enough to stablize a house of four as the only source of income. The narrator seems to be simply stuck or out of options, until a friend, Tim, suggests he sell some prescription drugs from work to sell illegally and earn more income to provide for his family. Though the dad immediaely rejects the idea at first, he soon realizes just what he has to lose: his home and family. He decides he has to try to do something even if that means going to jail and losing his family. It's almost a "catch 22" for our protagonist. The story ends with the narrator paranoid about stealing the pills he shoves into his pockets and counts how many he has taken in his head.
        I really enjoyed the entire storyline, but particularly, I loved the narrator's voice and tone throughout the peice. I thought he was extremely realistic and stayed true to his character 'til the very end. I even enjoyed the short sentences throughout. The ones that ones contained two or three words. For example on page one, when the narrator is reading the bills, "Missed payments. Final notice. Situation unresolved. Acceleration clause. Payment in full. One month." There are numerous short and to-the-point sentences that I really enjoyed throoughout the story. It made the narrator ver effective and allowed me to be able to really hear how he talked and thought. It gave me a small insight to the narrator.
        The only thing I would change or play around with is the ending. For some reason I'm not sure if I like it or not. Part of me likes that it ends with the scene of the pharmacy tech stealing drugs, creating mystery for the reader. On the other hand, I did want to know a little bit more of wat happened. Did he get caught? It could possibly be neat to end it with someone catching him and then saying that they do it too, or just ending with him getting caught? I'm not sure! Nonetheless, I really enjoyed reading the story!